NarutosBrat posted a comment on Tuesday 5th June 2018 5:15am for Chapter 5

As much as I want to cry foul for the Pizza Hut joke, it was too well executed. It was such a wizard/Dumbledore thing to say. Based on what we know, I could see Lily punting the horcrux.

agnar14 posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 10:22am for Chapter 5

The one thing bothering me about this chapter, is that everyone left Harry unguarded really, as even Harry said Dobby wasn't there as a bodyguard, *right* after he'd survived an assassination attempt and a second killing curse.

Really? NO ONE thought placing a couple guards would be a good idea? Or at least a rotating shift of a couple house elves? Astoria or her mom or Romilda, no one?

Seems a bit far fetched. I get you wanted or needed voldemort to still be reborn, though I don't see Harry's blood as being needed still, but it just seems incredibly careless and going against all the much more sensible and logical group around Harry that you'd built up.

It came off like 'super-Peter' able to just wander in to the 7th floor, back out past the wards, BACK in to the hospital wing and never a bit of notice by ANYONE until the stunning spells are fired. Seems an incredible stretch to me.

brad posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2014 3:25am for Chapter 5

This chapter really worked for me, for several reasons.

For starters, I got a really good 'Iron Man' feel out of this one (I assume I'm supposed to do so? :-)) Harry building a new set of armour for the circumstances, striding along the bottom of the lake ... the idea/image worked nicely.

Secondly, the bouncing boots scene was just plain fun. It didn't go overboard or over-length but I could almost see it happening. Good stuff.

And then the Killing Curse attack was quite a shock. And the scene with Lily was lovely.

- "Because we could have killed Voldemort, but I decided it was more important that we ruin his reputation beforehand."

Good one. So glad he pointed that out.

- "Neither of us wants to be above the other… yet."

Wondering what will be the outcome of this Crush Competition ... although you've said there's no romance in this story?

Look, I have an easy solution for you, one that avoids the sundering of Astoria's and Romilda's friendship. (You can see this coming, can't you?) GIVE HARRY TO HERMIONE. See, problem solved! Happy to help.

Great chapter, thanks!

diagonalpumpkin posted a comment on Saturday 25th October 2014 4:39pm for Chapter 5

Well this chapter is a bit of a kick in the teeth. Everything has been so nice and easy for them lately I kind of forgot about the evil and was not expecting a turn of events like this...It was quite effective though. I'm excited to see how Harry and the group fights back. Keep up the great work!

LordSia posted a comment on Thursday 23rd October 2014 7:33pm for Chapter 5

There's just something delightful about a Dumbledore who isn't completely incompetent or outright malevolent. Keep up the good work.

The Seeker posted a comment on Monday 20th October 2014 7:30pm for Chapter 5

You've again put your stamp on canon events and made them much more interesting, better written, and showing much more common sense, with the Second Task combining all of these elements. Your Daphne is unique - a wonderful, very talented young witch, who almost seems like a savant. Her use of 'do me' says so much about both her and Slytherin - two simple words to describe the cesspool Slytherin had become and the innocence of this wonderful character you've created. She was the right one for Harry to rescue.

The scene with Lily was emotionally written. Loved how both kicked the sick representation of Voldemort, finally sending him to Hell, as he well deserved. Astoria and Romi continue to be delightful and brilliant. And finally, your Dumbledore thankfully shows an understanding of what we has wrought and is making amends without any hint of manipulation or his normal amounts of sugar. With all of the highly negative portrayals of DD in HP fan fiction, it is very nice to have this realistic, funny and appealing depiction.

If memory serves, you wrote that this story will have nine chapters, so we're somewhat passed halfway. Safe to say, I'm greatly looking forward to reading the next four. Thank you for all your hard work and this brilliant, highly entertaining story.

- The Seeker

Patches posted a comment on Monday 20th October 2014 8:52am for Chapter 5

This is a great build up to the 2nd task. I love the way Hermione made them all take a day off and Harry made sure they did things each of them would enjoy. The bounce shoe soles were wonderful. What a great way to have fun. I look forward to the games they develope for those shoe soles. It was really fun when Harry let Dumbledore and Nadya both got to try them. I bet they had fun. I love the fact that Romilda is so gifted with cursing. I'm sure the one they gave Dudley was well deserved. The task was very well done and in a way Crouch Jr. did Harry a favor by getting rid of the horcrux in his scar. It is too bad that Wormtail was able to get the diadem out of the castle and then the blood from Harry. At least Harry and Dumbledore had a good talk afterward. Harry has good plans and I look forward to how you work this all out. I really like what you have done so far. Thanks for writing and for the consistent updates. I really appreciate that. p

joeBob posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 11:36pm for Chapter 5

Thanks for the update.

mwinter posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 11:14pm for Chapter 5

Awaiting more.

Jason Karr posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 8:55pm for Chapter 5

it is nice that the headmaster is willing and able to help Harry.

sh8ad8ow posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 7:57pm for Chapter 5

Excellent like always.

qwe33355555 posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 6:09pm for Chapter 5

Realy good. I like how you use the sweets to keep Harry and Dumbledore more human.

Stormwatcher posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 5:59pm for Chapter 5

This is an excellent story. I am enjoying it immensely. I have had a story involving technomancy on a back burner for a number of years. This may inspire me to do something with it.

keichan2 posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 4:14pm for Chapter 5

"metal against the sole of her boots" Oh? Is he about to have them "water skating"? (edit: Wrong guess… Never would have though about that!) (edit 2: No! I never even though about ICE skating!)

"and finally weapons were placed into his hands" I can’t help but remember the hero donning his armour in slow motion in those old Japanese series…

Thanks for the new chapter!

I hope to read more soon!

Tommy posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 2:53pm for Chapter 5

*amused* Uhm, won't having Harry's blood just forge another link? So if worst comes to worst, Harry could hurt himself and Voldemort would take the same wounds. The aim could be to find something that wouldn't hurt Harry, but would hurt Voldemort somehow. Give Harry the antidote first, then poison Harry and poison Voldemort at the same time. Or, *amused* he could duplicate the pleasure and love he feels the first time he has sex, and really test how much Voldy abhors love. :P Dunno, but it just seem like idiocy of Voldemort to forge another link when he'd just gone out of his way to destroy one. Maybe he assumes Harry wouldn't sacrifice himself much like he himself wouldn't? Hmm...

But I suppose you already have plans. An amusing thought nonetheless.

I enjoy your story, and will be looking forward to the next installment. :)

May The Words Be With You!

Tommy

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 2:52pm for Chapter 5

Great second task and it looks like Harry is making international friends as well. The actions of Wormtail seemed a bit too easy but still fun to read. Thanks for sharing!

Ravnos posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 2:22pm for Chapter 5

Oh wow, I already look forward for the next chapter to come out, but now, wow I have that much more anticipation for the next chapter. You have taken 2 relativly minor characters and made them an integral part of this story and expanded their characters in a very believable way. Great job and keep up the good work!

BJH posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 2:05pm for Chapter 5

Really nice chapter, although the raw action was missing it more than made up for it in depth of plot, from Peter being actually skilled enough to be a Marauder to Albus actually teaching, albeit not magic.

BJH

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 12:57pm for Chapter 5

Great update, I was enjoying the good feelings up to the second task, then Harry starts having dark thoughts, but lightened up at the end. Then bam out of nowhere it starts as an action thriller.

Well done.

migele posted a comment on Sunday 19th October 2014 12:28pm for Chapter 5

"The Headmaster and '' were looking amused, as they stared down at them." Minor error, I think you meant 'teachers', or at least for now I'm reading it like that.