NarutosBrat posted a comment on Monday 4th June 2018 3:33am for Chapter 2

I'm wondering if the potions and smithing in this fic is influenced by the Skyrim. While that Fortify Smithing potion only really uses any combo of three of those ingredients, I can see why you went with all four, as that would be more in line with how potions are made in Harry Potter.

Ldysabella posted a comment on Friday 21st July 2017 1:42am for Chapter 2

I've really been enjoying your writing style. I'm ashamed to say this my first review. I like the way you took three minimal information about Romilda and the Green grass sisters and brought their characters to life. Your OC is a delight. I was just so awed to find that you're an Elder Scrolls fan. The blacksmithing and potion recipes were such wonderful gems.

Wanderer posted a comment on Saturday 26th March 2016 8:12am for Chapter 2

So much fun!

Thanks for the Skyrim references, and for giving Harry a way to Become Uber, but not Giving him Uber - as per gimicky goodies out of the CoS.

M

gtgrouch posted a comment on Monday 24th November 2014 5:58am for Chapter 2

Delightful story, well-written and creative.

Slytherin66 posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2014 5:07pm for Chapter 2

A good oath by Daphne it was direct and honest.

It's extremely rare for anyone to formally apologise to Harry in 4th year never mind Dumbledore who was a poor Headmaster still it will be interesting to see what happens at Hogwart's. I wonder if the Hogwart's Divination teacher will get the sack.

I like how Harry is Greater and Albus is only Great. I hope House elves collect chocolate frog cards or make their own to collect.

Daphne with a hobby is a rare treat few people in Hogwart's seem to have hobbies.

Hannah was someone who thought Harry the Heir of Slytherin he is better off not dealing with her.

A house elf being asked their opinion would be something new.

A gypsy magic user makes sense but is something I have never come across in fanfiction so cheers for that.

A good idea to be armed by non-magical means the magical world is a dangerous place.

I loved how fast Dumbledore can move when he wants to. The Basilisk not being harvested never made any sense to me in the books the venom and fangs were needed and the carcass worth something.

Magical entertainment seemed rather lacking the cinema would be hard to resist and could be educational for pure bloods.

What was said by those going down the slide was one of the best bits of the chapter very funny.

I had wondered about Ginny in all this any hopes and dreams regarding Harry are gone now.

Good thinking regarding the horcrux much can be done with hair and blood a soul fragment lying about is not very wise.

" We get Malfoy to do a song and dance act proclaiming his love for Voldemort’s trouser snake." very funny to picture. I hope something is done to Snape as well.

"Salazar had plans, but never had the time to implement them." a refreshing change from the fully equipped chamber. I doubt Salazar planned to be banished from the place he founded.

I am very pleased the Dursley's will be punished.

A good point "A lot of kids do it if they are in serious danger." Apparition would take some explaining by a muggle.

I liked "This wasn’t up for discussion," as often it seems everything is discussed especially with Hermione around.

A nice end to the chapter.

brad posted a comment on Thursday 30th October 2014 6:39am for Chapter 2

> He didn’t think that mentioning that his type at the moment was "female" and "boobs" and after the last day, "his age" would help him achieve his goal.

One HERMIONE JEAN GRANGER satisfies these criteria!!! I'm just sayin'.

:-)

> Astoria felt like puberty chose that exact moment to kick in, as Harry sat up, showing that whatever else he wore in bed, it didn’t come with a shirt.

The 'Harry is suddenly Adonis' is a bit hard to take ... even in a story that includes elves, magical goblets and super!armour. Did you give an explanation that I missed? Did Harry grow up when he unleashed his magic? Pre-smithy-workouts?

> "I, Albus Percival Wulfric Brian Dumbledore, hereby formally apologise to Harry James Potter for not securing the Goblet of Fire properly.

Wow, that's a first. A recalcitrant Dumbledore! You don't see that in every story.

Crys posted a comment on Saturday 11th October 2014 2:13pm for Chapter 2

Interesting portrayal you're giving Daphne. And actually I'm surprised she's not in Hufflepuff from the description people keep giving her. Consistently called hard-working.

. . . dragonplate armor. We're really talking about dragonplate armor, aren't we? And that forge area is almost a spot on description of many of the forges in Skyrim.

Interesting little additions to "real" blacksmithing. Hook being traditional first and the method of lighting a cold forge. Little details like that make the story feel more real. You've consistently giving Kokopelli credit for the blacksmithing info, so I'll assume that's from him, but good additions.

> Blisterwort, a glowing mushroom, a sabre cat tooth and some Spriggan sap

and at this point, I knew you were giving a nod to Skyrim.

Hmm. If he actually manages basilisk boneplate (or scale) armor, I wonder if Amelia Bones will end up contacting him for making more armor for the Tactical Wizard Assault Teams.

As a complete aside, we could get into a conversation on plate versus scale basilisk armor and Harry's proven dexterity and defense based on movement. But that'd just prove I'm a hopeless geek. So I'll just suggest he doesn't forget the weightless runes if he uses plate.

The whole forgiveness thing. I agree that the people would be trying to do it (honestly or just for better food), and that Harry really, honestly, doesn't care much about them anymore. But you used it to make a point through Nadya. A good and not overbearing example of showing instead of telling.

Die Hard from Nadya? Really? And then Blues Brothers from Hermione. *laugh* I think the kipper thing was Red Dwarf, but never watched it, so not so sure of that one.

> "Show tunes!"

Okay, now you're just having fun with it :)

> while Dudley was getting his weight checked." He paused. "And there was a lot of weight to check

*snicker* Where do you come up with these?

kstchr posted a comment on Monday 6th October 2014 3:57am for Chapter 2

I love the positive, redemptive aspect of this...yes, people really mess up, but they admit it and everything is better because of it. Great banter between the girls...especially regarding Harry!! I also like seeing more about Romilda in this, and in a very positive light. I've never been a big fan of hers, but that's because of how she was portrayed in the books - love potion that poisoned Ron not withstanding. I was under the impression that Romilda was in the same year as Ginny, however, so I don't see how she's two years younger than Harry??

Lunis posted a comment on Sunday 5th October 2014 5:23pm for Chapter 2

Just a note those four ingredients wouldn't make a stamina potion, only a Smithing one, but if you replaced the glowing mushroom, or the blister wort with Honeycomb it would make a restore stamina potion that also increased smithing.

tangentsferret posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2014 10:13pm for Chapter 2

This is really fun. And the Skyrim smithing made me giggle.

millercommamatt posted a comment on Wednesday 1st October 2014 10:48pm for Chapter 2

I'm happy to see a more zany Dumbledore. There's not enough of him in fan fiction.

Stormwatcher posted a comment on Wednesday 1st October 2014 9:18pm for Chapter 2

A very enjoyable read. Truthfully, I do get tired of all of the stories filled with teenage angst. Interesting to see Harry blossoming and pulling the others along with him.

LordSia posted a comment on Tuesday 30th September 2014 11:35pm for Chapter 2

Memetic Gypsies are awesome. There is just something viscerally satisfying about Vengeance, as opposed to the much more moderate Justice.

sh777 posted a comment on Tuesday 30th September 2014 4:18pm for Chapter 2

I have enjoyed this story so far. Looking forward to the rest.

klidster posted a comment on Tuesday 30th September 2014 3:32am for Chapter 2

Its been awhile since I've laughed out loud uncontrollably while reading fan fiction. It remember it happening in 'Hogwart's Dawn' when Harry and his group, happily drunk, confronted Dumbledore (Hey, it's Dumbledore ... everybody wave!). You did it again to me here as everyone quipped jumping into the Chamber of Secrets, and just flat lost it with Hermione's Blue's Brothers homage. I actually started giggling, for heaven's sake. GIGGLING! I'm 67 years old and been married 46 years ... I don't giggle! (Sigh.) Anyway, great fun and I look forward to oncoming chapters. Thanks!

keichan2 posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2014 9:16pm for Chapter 2

"transfiguring rocks into wombats or something" Ah! Close… ;-p

"a metal bench table that was coated in dust" I have a hard time picturing dust anywhere in this room, given the elves KNEW they were coming here…

"There’s a hotel that your parents stayed in for their honeymoon that they raved about." Given it was more than ten years ago, Sirius might have a bad surprise…

"quicksilver" Harry is using mercury? Or is that some magical metal going by the same name?

"Very good balance, and decent spring" And Beaty qualified it as "not rubbish"?

"Cowabunga" Bwahahahahahaha! Especially from Albus! "Yippie-ki-yay, motherfucker" Bwahahahahahaha! And from Nadya as well! Astoria’s was good, too, and I was able to find Daphne’s one, but I didn’t get Hermione’s…

"with just some of his rat-hair" I DID think about it when Nadya started to giggle, then associated it with voodoo ("Saturday Potter" is a nice little fic) and dismissed as "not the same kind of magic"…

"Use the Black Lake" :-D I seem to remember a similar hangover cure ;-p

Thanks for the new chapter!

I hope to read more soon!

pakrat77 posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2014 8:26pm for Chapter 2

Awesome story so far. I about wet myself when Hermione jumped down the slide.

Lisagrace posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2014 6:47pm for Chapter 2

Love this. Love how Hermione and Harry are going the the craziness. The girls are greatn they add that step of wackiness needed. The quotes down the slide were wonderful and fun.

BJH posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2014 1:30pm for Chapter 2

Nice chapter, there's really not much to say beyond that.

BJH

GinnyLover posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2014 10:59am for Chapter 2

Love the story so far. That said i do feel like there should be a pairing for Harry in this. He has all these beautful/intelligent girls around him. Daphne may not be as smart as the others but she does just fine with encouragement.