Alone
Part 2
By Jeconais
Reviews
IXper posted a comment on Saturday 17th December 2005 8:42pm for Part 2
Awww, too bad for Sammy. If Ginny had to go through all of this to get Harry's attention, I would have loved to see what a grown up Sammy would do. Especially one as smart as her.
Donald McLeod posted a comment on Saturday 17th December 2005 5:16am for Part 2
nice story I like the interplay between Sammy and Harry. But would have liked it more if Ginny and Harry had a chapter to themselfs for demension. ---- thank you
Don
brad posted a comment on Saturday 17th December 2005 2:07am for Part 2
Well, it's a bit far-fetched, I reckon, to have the whole reason behind the Auror war games be a romantically frustrated Ginevra Weasley. "Acting like a bitch to [her] family for the better part of a year" seems a bit of an extreme method to get Harry to notice her. I *know* she explains why ... but, I dunno ... she could have just asked one of her family. Fred says "none of us bothered to tell" her ... which means if she'd asked, they could have easily done so?
Oh well, just nit-picking, fun story regardless.
The bit with Sammy at the end ... have you ever read Heinlein's "The Door into Summer"? Lovely story, with a nice fantasy/romantic conclusion that has a bit in common with what Sammy was after here (an *excellent* punch line/surprise twist - for me, anyway - that is really moving). I won't spoil it for you, but odds are either you've read it, or the Heinlein fans in the group have already talked about it.
(In all seriousness, it would be possible - without an associated 'ewwww' factor - to have a Harry/Sammy romance, were you to go down that path)
Enjoyed the actual war-games, of course; I'll have to read the chapter again in a couple of days time to absorb it better. My goodness, a) I didn't expect Harry to deck a girl, and b) I got a bit of vicarious satisfaction myself when I found out it was Marietta! Excellent. I think I must have read a couple of Harry-forgives-all stories when it comes to her for the last six months (including a re-read of Kokopelli's TLOS) so it was excellent to see Harry get his revenge here!
Harry's ... evolution? ... into a second Dumbledore was an interesting thought, but very satisfying; that and the emphasis that he wouldn't be alone. Good stuff.
Looking forward to the final story! Thanks for this one.
Alex13 posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 10:49pm for Part 2
That's the end of it?
How dissapointing.
The last bit was very nice.
The question about boobs and such had me laughing for a full minute and I had to share it with all my friends.
Anyway, despite that I'll be looking forward to the next part.
Alex out.
The Resident posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 10:36pm for Part 2
Exceelent part. I really like this confident Harry. I like the interaction with Sammy there at the end as well. All in all, a very enjoyable read.
stormmaster posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 5:35pm for Part 2
... WOO HOO! That was awesome! I didn't expect that twist with Ginny, but hey, it was a good twist. The image of a seven year old girl throwing fireballs is particullarly funny. You have once again outdone yourself, Jeconais, and I salute you. :D
uten posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 5:17pm for Part 2
I quite liked this chapter. The tactics in the fight were extremely well done, and did show that the Aurors were becoming sloppy.
Thye scenes between Harry and Ginny were well done as well. A typical Weasley reaction, as you wrote, but we are yet to see if Ginny does land him for good - even though it's in the Harry/Ginny section. Ginny's attempts were a little childish..
I find the intelligent little Veela you have created to the most interesting part of the story however. The interaction between Sammy and Harry, and Fleur in this chapter as well, is extraordinarily well done. Her love for Harry shows, as does her intelligence and wit. Her argument for Harry waiting for her to grow up and then marry her was quite sound, and even though Harry said he couldn't love her that way, I find myself hoping that it doesn't work out with Ginny and he does wait for that very interesting young Veela to grow up and become a woman, just as she suggested. Ironic, as normally the idea of that sort would squick me, but Sammy is just so interesting, and to be honest, from what you've written, she seems almost more mature than Ginny is. Makes me hope Sammy does land Harry eventually, even if she has to share him with Ginny. I look forward to the next chapter a great deal.
the-ravenhaired-one posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 2:49pm for Part 2
oh i totally totally totally loved this story. it was soooo cool and sweet and awesomeness. you're like my fave author ever. cant wait for the last part of the trilogy :)
Logan_MacLeod posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 11:41am for Part 2
I love this story
Prince Charon posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 10:19am for Part 2
Nice. Very nice, all the way through.
I look forward to the next one.
Em posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 8:26am for Part 2
Loving the story so far! Keep up the good work. (Although I suppose more frequent updates would be muchly appreciated, eh?)
One point: You keep referring to the "Imperious" curse. I believe, when giving the actual name of the curse, it's actually just the "Imperius".
Joe Ritter posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 8:09am for Part 2
You sure can spin a yarn. And I think I've fallen in love with Sammy. I would love to see her fight a little more with Ginny until Ginny proves herself to Sammy too. Ginny and Harry definitely need more time with this starting relationship.
Oh, this story is very much in your style. After all the varied stories you've done, I consider it just another of the wonderful facets. I love it and please continue writing your visions!
Fate posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 3:51am for Part 2
This was absolutely lovely!
I can't wait to read the last story of the trilogy!
noylj posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 12:16am for Part 2
What's the name of the story and why are you ending it here?
Maxennce posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 10:27pm for Part 2
very very cool chapter, but I had absolutely no idea that Sammy was quite that possessive. Shocked me that did. Keep up the great work, and just when is the next installment of Hope coming out? I was shocked when your seven day interval updating didn't happen Tim. But seriously, you should be entitled to have a life, and I shouldn't be so shocked when you act on your god given right to use it. So when you get a chance, think of us poor losers who hang on your every word and take it as drug takers going through withdrawl. Keep up the great work
Cheers
Max
Ali posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 10:16pm for Part 2
Tim, I hate to say this, but I was a little disappointed with this chapter. I enjoy H/G, but this felt a little sacchrine, a little off, and a bit of a step back from your progression as a writer.
The whole situation with Ginny was funny, but I feel that you've done this route one too many times. It'd be much better if she had set this up because she felt the aurors were slacking, and then threw in a remark about it being nice to talk to him as well. Let Harry put two and two together and realize he was shutting her out (unless it was deliberate). Ginny throwing herself at him reeks of desperation, and to be honest, doesn't sit well with the strong character I feel like you're trying to portray.
As for Harry, well, he just went with it. Once he'd pointed out to Ginny the situation, and how he didn't like being manipulated, he just went along with dating her. The only difference between her and the other girls is that he knows her and knows she isn't in it for the name. If anything, the Harry you've portrayed here seems like he wouldn't go out with Ginny, not because of her manipulations, but because he doesn't have those feelings for her. I just feel funny about this, but hopefully the next part will make things work for me.
As for Harry and Sammy, well, I feel that this is the best part of your series. Their relationship is very cute, and reminds me of my uncle and how close I was to him. I grew up wanting to marry him as well, and even told his fiancee at her first family gathering that I hated her (I was six, I had an excuse!). Sammy is perceptive, and loves Harry for who he is. Now, I don't know if it would work out in the long run, or if she were older, but I see more chemistry and more potential in this pairing than in H/G. To be honest, I thyink I would have rather just had a story about Harry and Sammy, and how their relationship develops, romantic or not.
Overall, it wasn't bad, nor poorly written. Just, well, disappointing. I'll withold judgement until the next part comes out, though. As we all know from Hope, the addition of a chapter can change everyone's perceptions.
Jack-A-Roe posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 7:02pm for Part 2
That was an enjoyable story. I loved all the Weasley's changing women.
I wanted to see Harry yell at the auror's, but it wasn't actually needed in the story.
AnnieBee posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 5:33pm for Part 2
I had forgotten that there was a cliffhanger on the first part of this story.
I must give you a huge THANKS and a standing ovation. Your story made me laugh until tears streamed down my face and my middle began to hurt.
I had a feeling that the challenge was going to be good, interesting and worthwhile but not hilarious.
Goo with the taste of strawberrries and cream ummmm. Ingenious!
I really enjoyed the portrayal you did on Sammy. That's one smart cookie!!!! And the event being seen on a BIG SCREEN by all those who remained behind. This story could have been a hazard to my health if I was to do as I usually do; eat and read at the computer. I think I would have choked on my food more than once.
Once more thanks; I was feeling kind of flat today. Now that the semester is over and I no longer have to live running from the bookstore to school, to pick-up my daughter and home to do the things Moms who are back in college have to do and steal some time from all of them nasty chores in order to be ablle to read my fanfiction.
Thanks for sharing a great story!!! ;)
Are you planning on taking it further? Just curiosity... Anyway Happy Holidays and thanks
for writing it.
Cheers, AnnieBee
PhishBulb posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 4:54pm for Part 2
I guess I agree and disagree with you saying that this is not one of your standard stories. You've written a girl who loves harry, who understands him better than most, who is fiercely loyal to him, and who inspires him to be someone better than who his is. These characteristics find their way into many of your stories. Only difference is this time they are in a 7 year old girl.
I enjoyed it, as I enjoy everything you write, but I can't help but wonder how things might be different if Sammy was 17 instead of 7. I can't help but feel a little bit sorry for Harry especially since Ginny, so far, has been so uninspiring. I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter.
edo posted a comment on Sunday 18th December 2005 4:24pm for Part 2