White Knight, Grey Queen
6 - Return
What a great chapter! One of the best in HP fanfiction. Particularly like the whole Pansy/Ginny/Daphne interactions.
I'm just re-reading this right now. It's absolutely some of the best Harry Potter fanfiction out there. The only stories that can come close are those by Draco664 and jbern.
I'm glad Harry actually agreed to take things slowly and even apologized to his friends. In many fics Harry undergoes huge transformations in a very short time, and expects his friends to deal with them instantly, which they don't; then they fall apart. I'm glad here Harry actually gives them time to deal with everything.
Good chapter and great story.
Some contrived and unlikely plot points bumped me, a bit, but this is a masterful bit of fluff.
I love this story, perhaps one the best romance stories I have ever read in HP fan fiction. Your relationship between Pansy and Harry is more logical, realistic and believable then most the cannon pairings from the books, like Harry/Ginny's sudden true love or Hermonie and Ron's fighting turning into lust as well.
If i have one complaint i kind hoped this would turn into a Harry/Pansy/Ginny and perhaps Daphine fic. You set them up to be all such nice girls who love Harry and like each other enough to be friends. Way more then most multiship or harem stories do. I hope in the future they get together.
i was very pleased with how this turned out. i think the whole thing with the ron hermy and gin worked out perfectly. obviously they wouldnt have reacted perfectly but i loved what you did with it.
about ot read the next chapter.
Well, you're revealing moments were as dramatic as I expected they would be. You managed to nicely knock Malfoy, Snape, Umbridge and Dumbledore down a peg or two without burning out your greatest attacks on them. And I loved McGongall's smug reaction to all the chaos. It's odd, her not being on Dumbledore's side, but it fights and she adds a nice bit of subtle levity in her unique position.
I though, for the most part, you got the main characters' reactions right. Ron's snap distrust was spot on, and I found Hermione idealistically over=thinking all of Harry's changes was pretty fitting too. Ginny's a tougher read because I think she'd be quite inclined to fight for what she wants. But fight against a situation where Harry's obviously happy? I think you got that one right, and I like that you (and Pansy) gave her chance to find that out herself.
And speaking of Ginny, like I said, I knew you had something planned for her. But I can't say I actually expected her to become instant best friends with two Slytherins. Still, that's a trio that has some serious potential for entertainment. I can't wait until they get a hold of her toadiness.
Looking forward, though, I've got to wonder how you're going to finish this in just two more chapters, even if they are long. This chapter was basically 20,000 words in real time (I pace, which for a chapter or two, at least, I can really get into), and that's got me wondering if you're going to race to the finish as fast as you did in TMW. It certainly seems that way, though I don't know whether that's a good thing or a bad thing.
Anyway, I'm still definitely enjoying this. Thanks for the hard work!
Hehe. I just wanted you to know that you've ruined me. I have been rendered completely useless. All I want to do all day is come home so I can read more. I have about 5 hours of homework tonight and the first thing I did upon arriving home was sit down and read for an hour and a half. That being said, I absolutely love the situation I'm in. It's not often I come across something good enough for me to drop everything and read it. So, although it may seem like I was upset about being, as Ron aptly stated, "whipped" by your story, I am thoroughly enjoying it. And please, I mean this entirely as a compliment, so don't take it any other way. I just thought it would be good to express my love of your work in a new and equally honest way.
I don't suppose that Pansy will share, will she? I mean, Harry needs all the love he can get...
They’re going to think Harry’s gone over to the dark side if they aren’t careful. Merlin, Pansy ripping Draco a new one was one of the funniest things I’ve read in a while. The whole hair conversation had me in hysterics as did “his dark hotness”. Dumbledore's serenity surprised me but I imagine he has his own reasons.
I was wondering if you were goiong to make a sequel to this story. I think it would be a most excellent thing to do.
I honestly can not get away from my computer because of this story. It is so much fun reading a good peice of fanfiction, and this defintily has potential to be one of the best. Romance, action, slytherin Harry, independent Harry, what more could you want lol? I love Harry's comment to DD about controling his pet. I also love Harry's proactive stance towards everything and in this chapter you can really see the action picking up. The revolution is finally starting, but I am sad that I only have two more chapters to go :( I know you might think I might be exagerating, but honestly, I like your story better than the real JKR's book six. Not that I have anything againest DD, but in book six he was really too much of "Dumbledore's man". I mean, after book five I thought Harry might mature a little and start trying to handle things his own way, butI was wrong. I also hated to see Harry so weak, exspcially using the same spells, iver and over and over. Enlough of my rant about book six though, back to your story.
Things I liked.....
Dobby, how can you not love that lil guy
Pansy, I still can not believe I am going for Harry/ Pansy in this
Hous elf magic
The "Dark Hotness' nickname lol
McGonagal getting involved
The heart to haert with everybody
And the Snape and DD bashing of course. They are my favorite past times.
Ch.6 - - The 'handling' of Dumbledore was brilliant, incredibly well orchestrated.
The initial crushing of Snape was delicious - more, more, we want more!
McGonagall is treat.
Gorgeous picture. This is so fun to read!!!
Pansy's a hotttttttty!!!!
I'm really loving your Harry, he's powerful but not overly so.
And just let me say, any fic that has a lot of Dobby in it... is a good fic.
Oh, that was an absolutely fabulous chapter. That picture of Pansy was lovely also. I'm sorry I haven't read the rest of the story yet, for some reason I didn't get any alert emails for this and the next chapter, but when I got the alert for chapter eight I went and looked back and realized I had somehow gotten behind. So I am now catching up. Anyways, the cahpter was absolutely fantastic and I loved every second of it!
Really good stuff. What can I say but Brilliant writing.
you might want to look at the lips in the picture in this chapter, they are a little of and look slightly wrong
I absolutely love your stories, possibly more than the most recent HP book, which left my husband and I severely disappointed. We check your site everyday. I hope you will post again soon.