White Knight, Grey Queen
3 - Recovery
Great first date. And Harry is Bruce Lee.
not too sure about the fight scene, but otherwise a great chapter. Kids being kids even if they are in combat training.this is waht most fan-fics miss, letting the charatcrs BE teenagers
Love your story. Just a question, is there a reason why a Navy Marine would be in the UK training Harry??? Does this have some larger meaning in the story?
Something that has always bugges the ever-living crap about this story. Jerusalem artichokes aren't "just some artichokes". The artichoke is a flower; what you are eating when you eat artichokes are leaves and petals. Jerusalem artichokes, on the other hand, are roots of the sunflower plant. They are more akin to potatoes or jicama, and have an altogether different taste and texture.
I hate when non-chefs create a "fine dining" meal that would never work in a real world restaurant.
Too cute! I loved that chapter, and chapter two. I am going to read more now!
that was great!!
the talking to themselves thing was hilarious! the ending was really sweet!
im nervous about school though...
OK, I guess I’m officially on board. This story is definitely eclectic in all the directions it moves, but it’s easy to read and quite enjoyable.
I really, really like what you’re doing with the time turner. It’s a completely clever way to build Harry into a fighting machine in a short time (while working Royal Navy officers into the story, no less). And it’s a great way to bring your characters together. It’s a lot easy to accept the way Harry and Pansy grow together when I think that, from their perspective, they’ve already been working together every day for six weeks by the time their first date rolls around.
And when you finally did have that date, you certainly didn’t hold back. Dinner and champagne at the Ritz followed by dancing a trendy nightclub? That’s about as far from Privet Drive (or the Burrow) as it gets. For that matter, so is better the pulp out of four thugs. But you’re making the H/G shipper in me feel badly for Ginny. Not only is she going to be blindsided, but it seems like she’s going to look like a little girl next to Pansy. The romance at the end here was definitely well done, though. You, like your characters, were patient and waited for the time to bring them closer. And it worked well because of it.
Dobby again turned in a masterful performance. The Chamber was a brilliant choice, and his ability to teach Harry elf magic was a rather clever idea I’d not seen before. I was also glad to see I was right about Tonks. Like I said I’m very interested to see who comes into the fold of Team Potter next.
You're a good author, Jeconais. But there are a couple of things that bug me. Actually, there's just one thing that recurs pretty often in this story.
I'm reading this to be reading a fanfic. I don't want to learn how to dance a waltz, shave, or tie a bow tie. You seem to think that everything needs a detailed explanation when, really, "Pansy spent the afternoon teaching Harry to dance," "Malcom taught Harry how to shave with magic," and "Malcom taught Harry how to tie a bow tie" would work just fine.
I realize that you have absolutely no obligation to listen to my ramblings and probably don't care for them. This is one of those "speak now or forever hold your piece" moments and I've never been very good at forever holding my piece.
You know I heard your fear deal before and like your interpretation. The way I heard it was, False Evidence Against Reality.
Love the mirror sniffing at control and Harry’s growth spurt being so dramatic. Pansy remains wonderful too. The little tramp remark had me chuckling as did the “we’re going to win!” Harry’s fight skills were truly impressive. Very well written scene and a lovely chapter. Love how you're developing their relationship slowly.
I really can not believe how good this is. I love almost everything about your story & I am glad that Harry and Pansy are now officially togeother. I am also glad Harry's getting the chance to live a little, and he can finally enjoy a little of the "high life". The dinner and club scenes were just great, and again I can not wait until everyone sees the two of them again at Hogwarts. Harry totally kicks ass and sod oes your story. Keep it up. Plz!!!
Ch.3 - - Everyone has probably commented on how exciting the fight scene was, and it was terrific.
I like the way you brought them there. The training and attitude adjustments were very well setup and written.
I cannot help but like Grouch and Macolm very much.
Ah, heh, heh... I was rereading this story (I'm a bit sick and troubled and wanted something fun) and I noticed that you referred to Jerusalem artichoke as, essentially, artichokes. The two actually have little to do with each other; an artichoke is a nettle whose flower and stem you can eat certain portions of, while a Jerusalem artichoke is a bush whose main edible portion is a tuber-type root. The Jerusalem artichoke root resembles ginger in appearance, radish in texture, and a cross between radish and artichoke (hence the name) in flavor. It is used, essentially, in the same ways as potatoes and turnips, and is especially popular as a replacement for flour in pasta because it acts similarly to wheat when ground and dried, but has very little in the way of digestible carbohydrates. And now that I've said that I'll have to look up on Wikipedia why that is... Ah, says that they store the carbohydrate inulin rather than starch which breaks down during cooking, giving them a reputation for causing flatulence. I guess that's why it's usually mixed with regular flour...
damn...i never knew that i would start to like pansy!!!keep up with the good work!!!
Very nicely done bro. You've exceeded yourself with this fic.
Very good. That was some seriously good writing. Really loveeed this chapter.
This is one of the best stories I have ever read!1!
Nice fic! It's nice to read a significantly more realistic Tonks who can actually think by herself, instead of blindly following Dumbledore.
I've always thought that Harry dating a Slytherin girl who wasn't about to be disowned by her family for dating him was more interesting that Harry/Ginny, Harry/Hermione, or Harry/Tonks, since this way the girl has some power, politically and finacially, and therefore isn't really playing the damsel in distress, and is spoiling him for a change, rather than vice versa.
Can't wait for the next update! It'll be... shall we say interesting to hear what Ginny has to say when she finds out...
Lovely this is third time i have read this chapter i have looked and looked but cannot find any mistakes. i enjoy the progress relationship and general plot wise keep up the good work.