Blaze of Glory
Maybe a bit off, but the promise of the writer within was there.
You have a true gift as a storyteller. I hope, one day, you use it professionally.
I think I’m going to be your first bad review here…this story might have been good like half a decade ago (even then it is kinda jumpy and not very concise at times) but at the present day and time its so cliché ridden that it’s ridiculous. I don’t normally leave a review if I don’t have much constructive criticism to say but seeing the fact that you only had 40+ suck-ups review your story just pushed me over the edge.
This story plain and simple reeks of inexperience it’s jumpy, the ideas don’t flow and the characters just feel fake. But to your credit I have to admit I liked the battle scene especially for the fact that it’s pre-ootp when there was only like ten official spells and you still managed to be creative...but even that wasn’t with out its flaws. Like seriously, fifth? (Cant remember their year for sure, I read this yesterday) year Draco punching a hole in Hogwarts wards…wards that are strong enough to stop unforgivables, no good guys seemed to die in this massive battle and Harry’s one liner after he beat Voldemort was a true goner.
This is surprisingly the first real semi rant I’ve written against “overenthusiastic” reviewers because most of the time I figure that the author could use the encouragement to write, even if it is shallow. But you are a tried and tested writer and I feel that you can handle me saying that the vast majority of reviews you have received for this story are pure shit written by over enthusiastic 13 year old H/G fan girls.
P.S. Thank you for letting me get that off my chest. I’m sure you already knew that but I just needed to write it down more for my own sake.
P.P.S. One last thing, I do think your work has improved over the years enough to deserve the kind of reviews you get.
I like this story, and they way that you wrote it. It was interesting to see harry trick Voldermort into killing Lucius.
I went through thinking: Bloody hell this is good, but my favourite part had to be the ending which made me sniff. Well, that and Draco getting bitten in two and becoming Myrtle's death partner. Fantastic story.
Though unbelievable when taken at face value, totally fits with the wonderfully insane world that JKR originally gifted us with. Her two latest books have gotten darker and, in my opinion, have not done her characters justice. I much prefer your take on the Final Battle.
Your story was uplifting and fun to read. I totally loved the image of a kneeling Harry Potter alone when the smoke cleared... of course the obvious drama of the moment was countered beautifully with hisI Never Want To Do That Again
That was a GREAT story!
Excellent, very well-written fic.
The battle scenes are very well done, and the fic itself is on an epic scale that few fics ever reach.
I am sorry I am so late in posting a review of this wonderful fic. I enjoyed everything about this fic but have to take exception to your Author Note about the characters being a bit off. In my humble opinion, any HP fic not witten by JKR is AU. If the characters are a bit skewed from JKR's version, so what. Their actions and personalities are such as to fit the AU you've created with your words. Don't worry about it. You wrote a damned fine story and I'm sure that most (if not all) of those who have read it, enjoyed it. Take pride in the great work you have done. Considering it was your first work, I find it truely exceptional. Please accept my praise as I don't give it out without due thought (ask some of the others I've reviewed on ffn. (grin) Keep writing; you're are one hell of a storyteller.
I loved it it is so great.
I had downloaded this story a few days ago, and just read it last night.
I must say that I was in tears for most of the story. I LOVED IT!
My only complaint was that it would probable be 2 weeks, not 2 days to get everything fixed up - but who cares! It is a great read and probable one of the top 4 stories I've ever read in fan fiction.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
That was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!love the edning.
This was a great story, especially for being your first H/G fic! I enjoyed the twist regarding the safely of the Great Hall, that was really clever.
This was great! It was intresting how you managed to get the four houses to work together without making it to cliche or anything. Keep up the good work.
great! i wish i could list here all the things i liked so much...but quite frankly my mind can't remember all of them because i kept finding MORE awesome things and i'd forget completely about the previous ones and now i'm just rambling so i better stop...
two words:bloody brilliant!!!
that was definately the best fanfic i have read in a long time!! keep up writing like this it brings joy to my day reading things like this the battle was pure genius!!
another great story, talk about ending the year with a bang :).
Was this chapter ten to "This Means War?" It certainly got me in more than one place.
Enjoyed it - thanks for sharing.