Aberbadger posted a comment on Saturday 8th July 2006 7:29am
That was LOVELY! I love little Sammy! She is so sweet. And also quite original. No-one that I've read, apart from Horst Pollmann over at Schnoogle, has really explored the psychology of Vela Children. Brilliant!
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 6:34am
The constant vigilance quotes cracked me up. Harry as the next Dumbledore is rather a foregone conclusion but the twinkling made me giggle as did all the pop culture references and his way of taking down 30 aurors so easily. Loved Sammy's bit at the end too. Great story.
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 6:13am
Laughing my head off at Kingsley quoting Samuel L. Jackson. The wanker joke was superb. I love the idea of Harry taking Sammy flying – it’s so cute. I know why you did it, but I’m not sure Fleur would have thought that at the girlfriend remark. Otherwise excellent chapter.
Brad1 posted a comment on Monday 27th March 2006 12:50am
i cant wait for the next couple chapters i loved this one!
Rocky235 posted a comment on Thursday 9th February 2006 10:54am
That was nice. I like warm and fuzzy.
“Smoke me a kipper; I’ll be back for breakfast.”
At least I get some of the references.
That Jeconais, "What a guy!"
Rocky235 posted a comment on Thursday 9th February 2006 10:08am
"A few years in the country had enabled her to speak English without the accent."
Yeah, and Hagrid got a new set of dentures and says, "The rain in Spain falls mainly on the plain." lol
I hope you're not one of those authors that thinks constant praise is annoying.
Praise, praise, praise.
Mariposa posted a comment on Sunday 29th January 2006 1:53pm
Great chapter! I loved the way you conveyed Fleur's "unwarrented thoughts" and how she pushed them away. It's those little details of human behavior that add realism to your stories that I really enjoy.
Steven Augart posted a comment on Friday 27th January 2006 8:24am
I enjoyed the story. Here's a minor nit:“It is,” Fleur said proudly, her cheeks still rosy. “In eight months, three weeks, Sammy will have a brother.”
Actually, a woman is never just one week pregnant or two weeks pregnant. For historical reasons, pregnancy is measured from her last menstrual period, even though we now know that conception and implanation of the embryo doesn't take place until later.
You could, of course, justify it by muttering something about magic, or about veelas taking a week or two extra to have children, but it seems like an easy enough thing to fix. I'd suggest keeping it vague, as the easiest correction here -- I forget the time frame of the story, but if it's set during the summer, then you can have Fleur say "in the spring, if all goes well, Sammy will have a brother."
However, given that a lot of pregnancies prove non-viable (more than half miscarry so early that the woman doesn't even know she was pregnant; at most, her menstrual period may be a day or two late), I'm surprised Fleur is so confident.
Rick Gale posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 2:26pm
Red Dwarf! I love it!
Great Story. I love Sammy. I think she'll do very well for herself.
I look forward to the end of the trilogy.
Rick Gale posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 1:05pm
Very realistic. I could see how Harry could be in this situation. I even like the way the 'pairing' ended up with the couples.
I hope Harry at least listens to Sammy and can find someone who wants to know 'Harry'.
FireRose posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 12:29pm
Another well written piece! I loved this chapter... The entire ruse around the training exercise was definitely something that I see Ginny pulling. I do feel a little sorry for Ginny, though, going up again such stiff competition as Sammy... :)
Lira posted a comment on Wednesday 11th January 2006 3:08am
Oh, love that line of Sammy about the fireballs! Cute story. :)
Elle T posted a comment on Monday 9th January 2006 8:48pm
This is just geogeous and a fantastic, wonderfula nd great piece of work!!
i really love it and i will be looking forward tot he rest of the story!!
Elle T posted a comment on Monday 9th January 2006 8:26pm
Very very very very GOOOOODDDD!!!
I love it!!
Good lucka nd great work!!
Jarrod posted a comment on Friday 6th January 2006 8:56am
Jec, Well done and well written as your stuff is. Though I gotta say, you need to work on finishing stuff up and not leave us hanging in a bunch of different stories ;-) Keep it coming!
Phoenixdor Dragonclaw posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 9:09pm
Great I love it, especially Little Sammie.
phsname posted a comment on Saturday 31st December 2005 10:09pm
haha...sammy is too cute...i loved it.
im surprised at how much you managed to pack into this chapter, and still manage to make it so...good?
as i said before, this is a very fun story, and i cant wait for the third part.
phsname posted a comment on Saturday 31st December 2005 9:21pm
the trading of the "normal", or more common at least, ships in this story are kinda awkward, but i find it sort of amusing as well.
anyway, while this story doesnt seem to stand out like your TMW and Hope stories do, it's a very fun read. i'm enjoying it a lot.
keep it up, :D
N Reynolds posted a comment on Friday 30th December 2005 3:39pm
Took me weeks to read this.
Getting a password takes you to a blank page.
Logging in gets a blank page.
Trying again asks your birthday which leads to a blank page
Trying again asks your consent leading to a blank page
Trying again actually brought up the story to read.
I'm using firefox mozilla, but the problem seems to be the html code, with the form action ending "&refer=" without referring to anything.
EricThorsen posted a comment on Thursday 29th December 2005 8:58am
I like this better than the story its a sequel to, if that makes any sense. I especially liked Sammy. There has been a lot of discussion about the realism of Harry accepting Ginny after the manipulation, especially with his reaction to Dumbledore. I see it more as a difference between level of importance... one manipulation lasted most of his childhood, the other lasted a few months with him as the target rather than the manipulated one. Goood work overall... I especially like the game of capture the flag.