White Knight, Grey Queen
5 - Planning
I got my call out of the way so i could reward myself by reading more of this. It's excellent. So much fun ...
This chapter was great and I have really enjoyed this very realistic version of Pansy. I have to ask what language Pansy is speaking in when she says, "La vendetta è un piatto che va servito freddo". The story is fantastic and I look forward to finishing it!
perfect entrance right there.
Kewl i LOVE it so update soon please (when are they gonna they have sex already):(
One of the great things about your writing is that the more outlandish it gets, the funnier it gets. This chapter totally cracked me up.
Perhaps the best example is Harry and Pansy's little trip to boot camp. I thought it was clever and amusing when of their trainers was a military officer. Next thing I know, your main characters are proving themselves -- impaling themselves even -- in front of a bunch of Muggles soldiers. And the Royal Marines have pledged to have their backs. That's insane, but it's definitely brilliant.
Speaking of which, Harry in this story is going to have an even more eclectic arm then he did in TMW, is he? Through in the Marines, knife fighting and Acromantulas along with the typical students, goblins and werewolves and that promises to be even more bizarre then the last I read one of your final battles.
I was somewhat taken aback by the speed in which Harry and Pansy's relationship jumped ahead at the end of this chapter, although that does seem to fit with what I've seen of your writing in the past. When your main characters act they tend to be totally decisive and committed. That might be part of the reason why your characters always seem to be much older than they are, but in the case of Harry's impending engagement at least it makes plot sense as being a tool in Harry's manipulation of Dumbledore.
To whit, I loved the entrance at the end here, by the way.
And as the H/Ger, I was rather impressed by Ginny's speech in the last chapter. It's obvious now that the point of contention there has passed, but I can't help thinking there's something more coming from Ginny. I'm think you've played her (and Harry's redheads thing) up too much for that not to be the case.
I know I'm rambling (stayed up too late reading this last night; which is why I didn't review the last chapter ... sorry about that) so I'll, stop here, but I'm definitely intrigued by how this is going to work going forward. You've built up a lot of big moments for the next chapter or two and I'm definitely looking forward to it.
-KC (who should have gotten over his closed-minded fanfic provincialism and read this a long time ago.)
You forgot the best in your italian quote--shouldn't there be a biene in there somewhere?
Loved how Harry reached McGonagall and then shocked her. This is a slightly nutty question: how often did you type Grouch for Gruoch? I loved the way you gave them a kind of exam. “You’re bleeding on my shoes” made me giggle again. “You two are going to make me diabetic” was another great one. Poor, poor Harry – he really needs that talk and can’t possibly want it. Harry’s plans are going to shock the whole wizarding world, his friends most of all. Harry with long braided hair is an image that will make me giggle for a while. Nice cliffhanger.
Ch.5 - - Your methodical takeover of the wizarding world is brilliant.
I never thought I could go for a H/Pansy, but...
For some reason, when I try to picture Dobby in his new outfit, for some reason I get a combination of a "Munchkin" card illustration and how I always imagined Musket looked in his coachman getup in the Westmark trilogy. Minus the flintlock pistols as big as he is, of course.
Damn this is getting good! Smashingly good fic! I get so sick of H/G obsessions, that this is refreshingly different.
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I love "White Knight, Grey Queen" Absolutely wonderful story. I hope there is a sequel sometime soon.
Very good chapter, really enjoying this story.
“How do you braid hair?”
Harry sighed and pulled out his wand. “This is
only as a thank you for earlier,” he grumbled,
casting a spell to make his hair grow.
“First you have to comb it well.”
You know, I'd really like to see a picture of Harry with a braid...
Can't you have a little talk to the artist of Pansy's picture in Chapter 6? ^_^
I was wandering about the speach patterns of Dobby when it applies to refering to himself, you have him speaking in the third person when saying his own name replacing the 'I'(first person singulaur), yet you make him use 'my' in possession:
'Dobby bowed, “Dobby is going to the Elf Council now to show off my new clothing.”'
'my' not 'his'
I was just curious.
Have I mentioned how much I LOVE this? Because I do. With a passion. That burns deep down inside. Just joking around. But I do really love it that much. I can't wait to read on, although it may be a while, unfortunetly. Anyways, sorry my reviews are so lacking in constructive comments, but I can't find a single thing wrong with your lovely story. I totally adored the chapter!
Yay! Gooo harry&pansy! *does chearleader dance*
Please update asap! can't wait!
My GOD!!!! This story has just been addicting since the beginning! It was a perfect slow romance for the two of them. I love your details that you portray for the two of them. And your plans about the wizarding world as funny as hell and brilliant to boot. I am clearly enjoying all of your fics that I have had the pleasure to read, I hope to see you update soon.
We're enjoying your story. I love the way you have Harry using his brain and gathering allies. I hope his friends remain "true".
I hope you continue with this fic. Its great! And it will be extremly interesting to see how Pansy is going to reveal her real face.