White Knight, Grey Queen
1 - Discovery
Brilliant ploy. Pansy was hiding her looks.
wright more harry/pansy and harry/hermione plz i love ur fanfics
I really liked this. This Pansy handled herself well. i think i like her, too :)
i think this is like the 10nth time reading this story i love it
I don't think Harry would have told pansy about the prophecy so quickly but other than that, very believable. Good job!
Here we find out that horking off a house-elf is bad enough (remember, Lucius Malfoy got knocked off his feet by Doggy three years ago, in Dumbles' office doorway); horking off *any* Parkinson (especially Pansy) is probably worse. Dobby, if he weren't a house-elf, would likely be a Gryffindor (given that Dobby was the Malfoys' house-elf, that says something rather disturbing about the Malfoys in general, and Draco in particular); Pansy would definitely come after you (and get you); however, you would have no idea when, or how.
Severus Snape, do you want to live beyond the war? If so, I would suggest you shut your yap and keep your ears open, especially about Harry Potter.
Harry is recovering (and getting closer to Pansy), Dobby is horked off, Tonks is horked off, and Remus is *getting* horked off.
Actually, that is being selfish. The problem is that the meaning of selfish has been perverted.
Properly speaking, "selfish" just means "concerned with one's own interests".
This is difficult for many to understand, as it is the position of the altruists that selfishness is evil, and since they are largely in charge, we are taught that selfishness is evil. As for helping others, by what right does anyone have a claim to your life? By their need? Why do their needs supersede yours?
This has always been my primary complaint regarding Dumbledore, who talks so much about the greater good, but has never actually taken upon himself the sacrifices he demands or imposes upon others. In this sense he is no less evil than Voldemort, even in canon, because both men want essentially the same thing, its just that Tom is willing to name what he wants (he simply refuses to consider the consequences) and Dumbledore is unwilling to name either.
I really like this story otherwise.
The only thing I dislike slightly is Harry being so weak and pathetic.
One of the few things I can find to criticise about your work is theway your characters tend to flaunt what they've got. Even when you write Harry as modest, he spends riduculous amounts of money, is described as gods gift to womankind and is possessed of vast estates. It is a skill to write about the rich and famous, however I would challenge you to write about the poor or middle class - you rely too much on the lure of money and fame, it would be great to see you extend yourself to write about a realler world.
My difficulty arises not because your characters are all rich (Hogwarts is, afterall, a private school), but because they are unrealistically rich. Having been through the private school system, I feel qualified to tell you that the attitude Pansy displays in this chapter - scorn at people less beautiful, rich and tasteful, is unrealistic.
Fantastic opener. I was a fool to put off reading it.
Fixing the canon errors would make it almost flawless.
Great first chapter. I really like the ambitious-not evil-Parkinson family.
Wow! This was a great chapter. I hope the rest of the story is this good as well :)
This was great! I loved this first chapter!
this is really good so far. of course its only chapter one.
i was really tentative about reading this because, i mean come on, harry and pansy? but i think im gonna have to work REALLLY har not to read it all tonight and get no sleep.
Finished Deathly Hallows yesterday 'round lunch.
Been looking for somthing nice and AU.
i liked the story but i didn't like part with implying harrypansyginny in the story woulda pefered just harrypansy
I know I said several times before that I was going to give your non-H/G fics a try, but since I've been here the last few nights finishing up TMW anyway I figured it was about time I actually did it. Hope probably would have been my first choice to start with, but I'm also trying to stay away from in-progress fics, so here I am giving this a try.
And to be brutally honest, you almost lost me in the first section.
Draco has only paid attention to me, as I’ve been a simpering hanger-on. I know that I have friends who like me for my personality, not my looks, and it’s been a really Slytherin thing to do - trick everyone in the house, including Snape, for my entire time there.
As the kind of canon-thumping reader who hangs out at sites like PS and SQ, being told five books worth of Jo's portrayal of a character was all a lie is not something that goes over well. I couldn't make that jump for some random author, but I know and respect your writing enough that I was willing to keep going. And I'm still here.
Where you deserve the most credit is for the state you put Harry in when the Parkinsons found him. Making him that helpless -- and I don't think that was too huge of a stretch from the Post-OotP perspective -- really disarmed a lot of the trust issues that this pairing naturally creates. And, as we've seen in canon, nothing brings characters together better than a good rescue.
I still think Harry here is a bit too open too quickly for my tastes (especially about the Prophesy), but given this background I could definitely see Harry being desparate to trust someone. That's especially the case given his lack of trust in Dumbledore and the Order, something that certainly promises to be an especially interesting point of conflict going forward.
At first I was also put off a bit by the fact that Pansy here acts so similarly to Ginny in TMW. But the more I think about it, if I'm willing to accept that Pansy's not a brainless cow, the ambition, the ruthlessness and even the willingness to commit to loving Harry almost blindly fits a lot more naturally here. As you've made clear in both stories, it is a rather Slytherin attitude. And it worked in TMW, so I'm guessing it might work better here.
And lest I sound too negative, I greatly enjoyed the Parksinsons' reaction to the Dursleys. It was refreshingly gratifying after all the righteous anger I've seen so often in canon and fanon.
So, anyway, that's enough rambling for Chapter 1. I'm definitely interested to see where you're taking this, and I'll do my best to keep an open mind.
Why, oh why, do so many people have a dislike of profits? It is time that the WW and RW realize that the profit motive if the best control to ensure that resources are used to their fullest by the whole of society. As long as the Parkinson's are not involved in fraud or coersion, they are a benefit to both worlds.
I thought a reread was in order, as you seem to have updated since I suddenly stopped recieving your alerts. I know I've read this story, but even ignoring the fact that I love it so much I had to reread it, I'm sure it will give continutity to the chapters I've yet to read, so I don't end up spending the whole new chapter trying to remember details from a year or more ago. So, I'm not sure yet, but I may not review every chapter, as I normally do, because my custom with rereads is only to review if I have something to say other than the fact that I love it, because likelyhood is you already have a review along those lines from me for each chapter. That being said, I may find the need to remind you how much I love it every once and a while, when the mood strikes me. So lack of review from me is a good sign really. Cause it something is bothering me I'll be sure to tell you about it.
Anyway, I actually do adore this story, I could barely put it down last time and I am looking forward to repeating the expierience and actually getting to read the end of the story, which I had been waiting for.