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noylj posted a comment on Sunday 16th April 2017 9:46am for Princess

Still, like to have gotten to the wedding.

Drama is over-rated.

Toby860 posted a comment on Friday 7th October 2016 11:39am for Princess

I like it. While short it is well thought out. The mini epilogue isn't necessary as the ending is perfect. The open ending leaves it up to the imagination. A picture of Melissa for imagery would be nice.

Feno3000 posted a comment on Friday 4th March 2016 9:19pm for Princess

Well mostly this is still very good writing. I could have done without the bit about Lizzy of the Thames, your insane naming skills need proper supervision by an adult person that preferably does speak the language of the country the persons are meant to live in and it is a trifle hushed as an event, but then the last factor DOES make for a hilarious comedy feeling, a lot of what would usually stem from "conflict" can be replaced here with the everlasting flow of neckbreaking speed turns and twists and the insanity of it all (works in movies and tv series all the time) and at least the cast works quite well.

If you'd ever tried to repair or write a marginally more believable version of something like this though you should probably not make the sidestory with the two "handpicked" girlfriends go so absurdly quickly into nothing, wasting the whole potential for misunderstandings, grudges and all that for a cheap "don't you dare ever doing us a 'favor' again, Granger" (why not have somebody with more perception than tact - like Ron or maybe Luna - point out Nevilles likely involvement in the porn affair and keep the sidethread running?) and if you insist on pulling up such a shock moment revelation like the freeing of the elves, maybe make more to properly lead up to it...

Had Hermione not started "on the eve of disaster" but the whole "Operation get Harry laid" gone on for weeks if not months with the attempt to get him into double dates, bring both together in situations ideal for flirting and whatnot, finding it more and more tasking to invent yet another reason or excuse to have time for another try... and had it been interspersed with elves being treated bad or ignored in their wishes moments, Harry always weaseling out of the attempts to get him into commitment or even look interested, vanishing randomly and without trace and being more and more run down from the stress and effort put in his courtship of the Princess, the ultimate discovery that he planned his wedding and worked tirelessly on being acceptable to king and queen, learn french and get Melissa to fall in love with him, would have come perfectly fine into a well prepared environment and story.

Seriously what stopped you from having Harry already thinking about the wedding and all preparations done in the background by elves he had freed weeks before by causing the ministry or the owners to break the contract and "buying up" all broken / breeched contracts with the new rules, all Kings and Queens informed and Melissa at least already "doyouliketogooutwithme" girlfriend, the revelation for the READER would still have been breathtaking and Hermione going into Tilt&Reboot mode and slowly recognizing all the signs and finding out how well she got played by shy and innocent Harrikins over half a year, would have been a great punchline for the end...

Her parents arriving at the "Ball" in the know and having helped with some things like the Dursleys could have rubbed her "inattentiveness" in even more.

As it is the wedding thing hangs a bit loose inside a lot of threads that come out of nowhere and end in nothingness, which i guess is a big factor in you disliking the result. But well, sometimes even silly litlle ideas need a 250k story to work out as a good plot and story. There are definitely enough brilliant ideas and good dialogue in this to make something great out of it if you'd want to. Heck it's still good for laughs and giggles and it's the skeleton of a story. Must be great to be such a good writer, that your worst results still make decent entertainment . *sigh*

Renzo7 posted a comment on Monday 28th September 2015 6:50pm for Princess

This is a fun piece! The lack of a summary made me disregard it, and now I'm glad someone recommended it in a forum. Please give us a Harry/Fleur story, Jeconais!

OSF posted a comment on Tuesday 16th June 2015 1:24am for Princess

nice romantic comedy. Thanks for posting it.

OSF posted a comment on Tuesday 21st October 2014 8:59pm for Princess

I really enjoyed this. Even though I would like more you ended it in a place I'm feeling happy about. Thanks for writing it, I liked your portrayal of Harry.

Sanabalis posted a comment on Sunday 4th May 2014 6:14pm for Princess

I definitely love this story! I guess I love most of the stories where the answer is: "He's Harry Potter." :)

Stormwatcher posted a comment on Friday 9th August 2013 4:59am for Princess

Sigh, I just know that it would do absolutely no good to ask you to carry on with this fic. If it helps, it makes a wonderful piece of crack fic.

sh777 posted a comment on Monday 5th August 2013 6:35pm for Princess

Would love to see this finished.

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 3rd August 2013 6:59pm for Princess

Hope is perfect.

This story was near perfect until you ended it.

Conflict is not necessary to a story. This story had the momentum moving it.

Any crap author can write angst and conflict. A really good author can simply take you on a story.

Nytefyre posted a comment on Wednesday 13th February 2013 3:41am for Princess

Well... I can't disagree that this is fluff in the sense of lack of conflict... but it's FUN fluff.. I had a wide smile on my face through most of this story. IMO, sometimes a little bit of fun is just what the doctor ordered. Don't know about the closure portion.. but still wish there was a bit more. In some ways, this is very much calling out for a honeymoon/end of wedding "And they lived happily ever after. The End." fade-to-black.

Thanks for posting.

saas2813 posted a comment on Friday 9th November 2012 11:19am for Princess

Hi,

Sure, there is not much conflict but you still have the "fight against the environment" part in actually pulling the wedding of in time.

Besides it was funny and you write a good storry so what is there to complain about?

Overpowered "perfect" characters might get tedious in a long story, but this short one I enjoyed and would happily have read a second chapter. I can see how actually keeping it interesting could be hard tho.

philh1985 posted a comment on Friday 3rd August 2012 11:14pm for Princess

I rather like this story and wish it had at least continued thru the wedding. I saw you feel it isn't a story because it doesn't have conflict. I agree that stories with conflict are entertaining, but I also happen to like stories where the good person/people have good things happen to them without any unnecessary drama/angst. In the case of Harry Potter, we've all read the horrible parts of his life, so reading a flat-out good part like this is very nice and I would love to see more, both of this particular story and this kind of story.

Phil

David Thacker posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2012 7:01am for Princess

This is a story I wish there was more to.It is just so damn fun to read.

Robin Westerly posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd May 2012 9:57am for Princess

You know that feeling when you hit rock bottom and everything goes greyish; you know the feeling will end eventually but it is horrible to just wait it out. Then completely by accident I read TMW when depressed and it started me on the ladder to climb out. I have now read everything here over and over again when I am in extremis and I feel it is about time I thanked you. It doesn't work everytime, but then there is no such thing as a perfect cure and I am grateful for any help at all.

Oops, I got side tracked. What I meant to say was that this pulled me out last night and I think it is fan-bloody-tanstic. (I know this sounds incredibly cheesey but if I were to ever get married, to read then end of this would be a perfect wedding gift!) So thank you for writing and here's wishing you a happy Wednesday

wolfey posted a comment on Wednesday 21st March 2012 12:55pm for Princess

You know I actually like the general premise of the story. where harry chases the un-obtainable girl. I even like melissa's personality.

kyoshi posted a comment on Wednesday 21st March 2012 2:11am for Princess

Wonderful story but everything was too honky dory! Everything was too easy for Harry. I like a little more drama.

djo posted a comment on Sunday 26th February 2012 12:05am for Princess

I probably reviewed multiple time salready, but I love this story too much!

Whenever I need to get in a good mood I re-read 'Princess' - it makes me laugh and smile the whole way through!

And no, I don't want you to continue it - I fully understand yor reasons to stop it at this point; there is no menaing in fleshing out your 'outlook'

Thank you so much for posting it! For me it saved a couple of bad days already!

booster-t posted a comment on Wednesday 19th October 2011 8:27pm for Princess

You know, after three days of meetings, this was just the cheer me up that I needed to put a smile on my face. Sure there's no conflict, but why is that so bad? eEvery now and then, it's fun to read a light-hearted story that just feels good.

If it was up to me, there would be more of these ... angst and adventure are alright, but a nice fluffy happy pice has its place too.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2011 6:56am for Princess

This is a very good, you made Queen Elizabeth so easy to dislike.

You are about the only author I will read their abandon story's, I find reading abandon story's is frustrating.