6 - Tintagel
Ahh... Bayard. I like that name. ;)
'Harry responded with a single gesture that perhaps wasn’t the politest reply one could make, but which got his point across perfectly.' How? By raising his middle finger? Hehe... XD
Oh and by the way, loved how you added the twins here! I sooooo love those two! Hahaha!!! XD A fanfiction with them around is always a fun read! :)
Oh and, that part about Merlin? I loved that as well! :D
Keep up the good work!
After reading this story and specifically this chapter more times than I can remember, it's about time I commented. In my opinion, this chapter is arguably one of, if not the best, ever written in HP fan fiction. Especially outstanding was the progression of the Harry/Gabby relationship, from the classic, 'orange is not a good color for fish,' to the relaxed fun at crazy golf and your educational interpretation of the Arthurian legends, accompanied by a visit to Merlin's final resting place. Most importantly to both the chapter and to Harry were the explosive scenes along the beach, ending with Harry apparating them to the bed in his cottage, where he finally realized he was no longer alone, despite his best efforts to remain so. Thanks!
That was great! How they finally kissed was very natural and realistic. Well done!
This was an absolutely lovely read! So much love and passion and told so gently. Beautiful work, Tim!
I love your Arthurian legend!!!! I am now believing that it is the only good Arthurian legend out there!!!
This fic is AWESOME!!!!
Fred, George, Ollie and Katie just makes the story better with how you write. And then an awesome date with a King Arthur story and guest appearance. I am greatly enjoying this. Thanks
I have a question... If he had a dark magic detector that is almost always on.... How did he not notice the bone?
Outstanding story, I really love the fun stuff. Nice writing.
this chapter of the tragic but faithful tale was ausome i totally luved it keep writing.
Very interseting story, bit disapointed with the Divination professor's betrayl. Seems a bit shallow to me and how could she get such information out if she is suposivly already being watched? it's not like the two are super secret spy's or anything.
Hmmm... I'm a bit disappointed! I thought I could find some problems with this fic, but so far it's PERFECT!!! Oh, one or two typos, but even the best published books have them, This is one of, if not the best fan fiction I've read, and the pairing is extraordinary. I'm sure the rest of the story will be just as absorbing. Sad to say, I'm not getting much sleep until I finish this one.
Excellent plot and writing.
Hallo, (bad to start a review like that, but i don't know how else i should start ^^)
As i am a fan of everything concerning Harry and a Veela (or Vampire or things like that) i rally liked that story (as there are so few out there even after doing search runs for 2 years and more). i would like to write myself, but i have the problem that i get stories startet and then loose the drive mid story....but anyway this is not about me, so please continue this excelent work (this story maybe finished but there are many more out there to write :)
with best wishes,
“No, you think of me as Harry, your Mate, and everything else, but you have to remember that I’m also Harry Potter.”
“What does that mean?”
“That I’m practically unkillable,” he said with a grin. “Now do it again, just faster.”
LOL, I love this story.
Thanks for writing :D
Interesting... I've noticed considerable ret-conning regarding the Mating process. Namely, that 8 year old Gabby didn't know it would not allow Harry to have a relationship (from earlier) and now, it's implied that if Harry had met 'a worthy woman', the bond would have snapped on its own.
I suppose this allows you to have Harry's dramatic outburst when he learns the truth... and then later make Gabby a more and more sympathetic character. But it's still noticeable, so I'm sort of conflicted with regards to how well it works for me as a reader. Maybe I'm just thinking too much about it, lol.
Very nice close to the chapter!
so is there goign to be an update today
Good chapter. I really like the progression of Gabrielle and Harry's relationship as it seems so very natural.
Only comment would be the sudden plot twist of Snape, Draco, Trelawney and the Beuxbatons divination professor plotting against Harry seems quite forced and only there to give Harry some adversity.
Thanks for writing.
This chapter screamed romance. They finally kissed. And hot damn was it good. Evil divination teachers. Are Malfoy and Snape gay with each other? HAHA. I love how you compared Harry to Merlin and there similiarities and differiences. Again, I loved the final bit with Gabrielle and Harry sleeping in the same bed. She is far maturer than a normal 16 year old. Great chapter. Runs off to next chapter.
Tintagel is so beautiful. Have to love Ollie asking Harry to negotiate his contract for him. Have to love that Neville is a private defence instructor too. Have to adore the way you used the King Arthur myth too. The faculty having purple hair was so amusing. Loved the Goblin bone chip bit too.
Awesome, that was some seriously good writing.
lol...u sooo butchered dumbledore, and just about everything else related to hogwarts in this story...
not that it's bad, i'd rather call it...creative...and unique?
haha. i love how it's going. it's very heart-warming.