Hope
By Jeconais
Magnificent story,
absolutely one of the best I ever read
your style of writing is close to professional standard, I think
loved it
sry about my english, it isn't my first language
okay this tale just gets better and better as each chapter goes on. I have read HOPE at least 3 times and i absolutly luv it. i mean every time i read it, it makes so much better i cant explain it. But it is just how i feel when read the HP books over and over. if i have said it once i have said it a million times this tale so fits the title. just a boy and girl hangin and clingin to a very thin strand of unforgiving HOPE. i luv it. but i do have to ask i have read quite a few of ur writings even though i havent commented on them all but any way back to my question is there a reason why in quite a few of ur tales or chapters Dumbledore is the bad evil guy. i mean have you never noticed it or is there a reason.
I like this story.
Keep up the great job.
I love how they quickly find comfort in being together. Harry doesn't articulate that feeling but he never seems to manage it.
Scott
I have to admit, the way you write Harry's internal conflict (with just about anything) is very well done.
Since I've already started, I've decided to keep going with this story. But don't think I've forgotten your recommendations. They're high on my (rapidly expanding) list of things to read.
First of all, I was happily surprised by the ending here. I appreciated seeing that Harry was wise enough to realize that his strings were being pulled. But I liked it even more that, rather than
just getting mad or sulky, he needed to take an active approach to figure out why he was being manipulated. Of course, that advances your shipping plans nicely, but it also hints that there could be
significant points of conflict between Harry and his allies down the line and that's only got me more intrigued.
Elsewhere, I realized as I was reading this that another thing you like to do in your stories is have Harry and his closes allies mold the environment around them to suit his needs or desires. You
did it to a certain extent in WKGQ and TMW, but you're even more overt about it here. It certainly serves to show how powerful and respected Harry is that he can walk into a school for the first time
and completely restructure the way the place runs the first week. And you obviously do need some sort of system of subdivision to do what you want with Quidditch, though with as little as we know
about Beauxbatons, I'm not sure why you didn't just set the school up that way to begin with. Looking for extra reasons to make Harry and Gabrielle work together?
Anyway, back to Quidditch. I love the idea of an inter-school tournament. It's a really nice way of bringing fanon in line with what we see in the real sports world. It also gives you even more
freedom with your setting (It'll be very interesting to see what you do with Durmstrang). But that it's such a tense subject is what's even more interesting. I can't say I'd ever considered the
possibility of Harry's returning to Hogwarts for a Quidditch match being one of the biggest points of conflict in a fic. But if you're going to play up Quidditch in a story, you might as well play it
up big time, right?
And that brings me to Dumbledore. I'm having a hard time wrapping my HBP-influenced mind (Dumbledore's man through and through) around the fact that he could have alienated Harry so much to make him
avoid Hogwarts so vociferously. But I suppose it's a logical enough worst-case conclusion to have drawn from OotP, and like I said, it makes for a very thought-provoking point of contention. It also
forces your Harry (both here and in WKGQ) to act more independently, which can only help develop Harry's character when you make him as powerful as you do.
Anyway, I know I'm rambling tonight, so I think I'd better leave it there. But Thanks as always for the interesting read!
-KC
The 'cursed hair' line made me laugh out loud!
Gabby's comment on Fleur's performance in the Tournament was a trifle harsh, wasn't it?
Is the arriving 15 minutes late a real French custom, or a Beauxbatons thing?
With the possibility of corrosive liquids or poisonous gasses being released, is the fourth floor really a good spot for a potions lab? Even with charmed floors, etc... I don't think I'd want the
room directly under that one...
Seeing Harry go into combat mode was chilling, and definitely sets the reader on edge. Foreshadowing? And now we know why he won...
Jean's soliloquy on how great Harry is seemed a little... maybe overdone? Like he was reciting a formal speech. Maybe there's a reason I'll discover farther in, but it was sort of jarring right
then.
The vampire impression was a nice touch. Intimidating without breaking the Statute of Secrecy!
"“What have you done now?” Hermione sighed." Had me laughing out loud again. I guess some things never change, do they?
Albus' little stunt definitely takes the story into a darker direction as the plot kicks into gear, and segues nicely into Harry's growing suspicions.
Again, nicely done!
koool so are u going to update today so we get number 12
"I shall teach these ruffians what happens when they interrupt Nosferatu’s dinner" Absolutely hysterical line!
I like that Harry is suspicious, he just isn't dumb enough to fall for this.
I think that Harry helping to re-develop Beuxbatons school into this house systems seems a little far fetched for someone who is a flying instructor.
Thanks for writing.
Monkey
I have to say that I'm with Harry on this one, it's feeling artificial(sp) and rushed. I think Gabrielle would stand a better chance if she came clean.
WoOt..another chapter done! Boo!Draco Malfoy. Maybe he dies sometime at the end or turns out gay maybe? HAHA. WoOt for my new favorite ship...Harry and Gabrielle!!!
Harry’s vampire impression was fantastic – how could I not love it? Love the normal rules not even talking to Harry. Poor Boy, he gets manipulated at every turn.
The only thing I don't like about this story is Ron and Hermione's characters. Harry would never let them tell him what to do.
Outstanding story.
gunny
excellent ending to this chapter...
this story is developing very well, im enjoying it immensely.
:D
Brilliant stuff... I like how you're able to find the right kind of romance between Gabrielle and Harry... I was obvious that they couldn't have an exactly conventional relationship, and you've incorporated that really well. Update soon!
Great story,keep up the great writing
I like the story and the characters.
Your writing skills are first rate
