viviana posted a comment on Tuesday 26th February 2013 12:50pm
I really love your story, it's one of the best i've read, and considering i've read over 778 fanfics of Harry potter, that's saying something. I'm looking forward to more, but i wish you'd update more quickly, it's keeping me in suspense. A shame you've changed your mind about Fleur, i really like the Harry/Fleur pairing and there aren't many fanfics with this pairing. May I make a sugestion? How about making this a Threesome Fleur/Harry/Kate fic, after all Harry is powerful, rich and has a huge burden of killing Voldemort, so he needs more than one woman to keep him sane. Its just a sugestion i'd like to see, but the choice is yours, this is a really good fanfic. Please update quickly.
calison posted a comment on Sunday 24th February 2013 5:34am
Fuck this story is amazing I could sit here and describe all my favourite parts and the nuances then emotional content and the way the characters evolve over the story for the next twenty minutes and only get across a fraction of what I wanted to convey so I will instead tell you the worst part of this story. . . . . You ready?
The scene where Harry saves Gabby doesn't have a great flow to it
Fanfic Guardian posted a comment on Saturday 23rd February 2013 6:30am
Well written, no grammar mistakes (except the occasionnal typo, maybe), good characterization, yadda-yadda-yadda.
I mean, I like you as an author, already, and I'm not going to waste my time (and yours) giving you absurd flowery compliments about things we both agree on. It is a good read. Period.
However, I really don't like your Harry. He began as a character, now looks like a plot device. He is too rich, too powerful, too confident, too charming.
In fact, I struggle to find him any flaws. He is always right, everything goes his way, and all those who oppose him inevitably become high class buffoons that bow to his superior strength and will.
The kick-boxing championship, for exemple, left me a bitter taste. This guy, with no real prior training, decides to take kick-boxing as a mean to keep fit and be able to defend himself. In a few months of training (you can even stretch that to three years if he spent all his time doing it in the time dilatator, but without a sparring partner, I do not think so), Harry becomes good enough to beat every guys in the country?
Not. Gonna. Happen.
I've been practicing martial arts for 20 years. We see genius every year. All of them get squished for overconfidence in their first competitions and need this to actually become any good. Talent never replaces experience. Never.
This would have been a good occasion for Harry to get trashed after his third fight and get a quick understanding of the long way he had to go. But you needed him to do this, and that's when he began looking like a plot device and less like a character.
Basically, Harry is too smooth and not enough flawed. I tend to favor flawed character, because I, as the reader, can better identify to them.
This Harry sounds often like an overinflated balloon. I would love for him to get taken a peg or ten, and get regular tongue trashing by another character. Not gonna happen, of course, but damn would it feel good.
The Great Phoenix posted a comment on Wednesday 20th February 2013 5:26am
I like that you kept Dumbledore as a misguided good guy. You're also great at dialogue, especially comedy it seems, which I greatly appreciate. You do have a few things mixed up time-wise though. 1) The Dark Mark gradually reappeared on people's arms over the course of fourth year, so a bounty for arms with the Dark Mark on them is unreasonable, let alone that I don't think Harry even knew what it was before the graveyard. 2) This story takes place in 1994, so it would be impossible for a waiter to serve a '96 bottle of wine like he does on the first trip to La Rochelle (idk what chapter)
santiln posted a comment on Tuesday 19th February 2013 7:25am
As always this 2 last updates were really good. It was kind of rough the one with Snape's death so to be kinda back to what this story started like was really good.
I'm waiting eagerly for your next update.
The Resident posted a comment on Monday 18th February 2013 12:21pm
I'm quite enjoying the story so far. The new setup with Professor Sinstra(sp) is something completely new. It's hard to find new stuff in stories these days and I find it quite refreshing. Keep up the great work.
The Resident posted a comment on Monday 18th February 2013 10:57am
Quite an interesting chapter. I enjoyed it immensely. (But then again, I have enjoyed all your stories.) Keep up the great work.
Arithmancy posted a comment on Monday 18th February 2013 12:45am
I'm sorry about your personal events, and shall not pry. Thank you for writing.
sparrowphoenix posted a comment on Tuesday 12th February 2013 3:33pm
One of my favorite stories. It's entirely plausible and I like how Ron and Ginny have been marginalized. I'm not a fan of the two of them (Harry/Ginny) in many stories, except a few, and well Ron, it's best to push him to the side quickly.
Keep up the great work and I look forward to the next chapter.
Anand posted a comment on Tuesday 12th February 2013 1:15am
I haven't read any reviews about this chapter, so perhaps it has already been mentioned, but I wonder if the darkness Fluer senses is the horcrux? Or is that cannon plot point not relvent to this story? Love this fic - a really orignial take on the Tournament and I adore your noncannon characters.
keichan2 posted a comment on Friday 8th February 2013 6:34pm
This quite the interesting twist you gave us at the end... I suppose Aurora is now head of house ;-) Thanks for this new chapter. I hope to read more soon!
rejndzer87 posted a comment on Thursday 7th February 2013 9:40pm
interesting. as you stated in the opening remarks, rather over the top, but very conscious of the fact, and thus impressively executed. most kids seem a bit too mature at one point or another, but if i can read through a story of an 11 year old harry as a very successful headmaster of hogwarts, i can damn well read this without complaint. looking forward to reading more of this story.
Patches posted a comment on Thursday 7th February 2013 10:57am
I really like this story. Harry is really a mover and shaker in this story. He sets people up in their dreams. He offers them training in what they want to do in life. He makes the things they want to do affordable and supports them up front but expects to see a profit down the line. I love the way Hogwarts is catering to him. He doesn't ask but she gives. It is great that Dumbledore is trying to repay Harry for all the mistakes in made in Harry's life. The talk with McGonagal was great. I love the way Dumbledore shot down her wish to control Harry and make him follw rules. The relationship with Fleur and Gabrielle is complicated but because they are Veela it makes sense. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. pms
cjonbloodletter posted a comment on Thursday 7th February 2013 5:35am
You know, at the end of all this it would be hilarious to find out that Harry really is the decendent of Mum-Ra.
Children-of-Bodom posted a comment on Thursday 7th February 2013 1:16am
Thanks for the new chapter. I loved it!
But your last AN had me scared. I hope your cynicism does not cause you to abandon writing any romance or definite couples in the future. Because that has always been one of the things to count on in a Jeconais fic ;)
WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Wednesday 6th February 2013 2:14am
I have to say that if Hogwarts can manifest a body, or possess an existing body, Harry would find himself unable to get out of bed for a very long time. The school also seems kind of stalker-ish with Harry by the comment that it has a longer memory of Harry than Harry has of her. It would figure that Harry and Hogwarts created a new "house", in the actual sense more than the figurative. If the school was not jealous of him before, it will be when they figure things out on who all is in the new house and whom the head of house is.
Brad1 posted a comment on Wednesday 6th February 2013 12:13am
love the new chapter!
selonianth posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2013 10:51pm
Sometimes it's best to think of Harry as the Wizarding Tony Stark. Rules, regulations, timetables, etc etc are all well and good... except when they get in his way. Then they have to suspend themselves and let him do whatever he wants.
Man of Kent - Railwayman posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2013 6:05pm
A relly excellent chapter of an excellent story
Zooxle posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2013 6:29am
You did it again. You did the same last year, the day before university starts up again you update my favourite story. No i'm not just saying that. Of the thousands of fics i've read, Hogwarts' Dawn is by far my favourite and the one i wait for the most. I don't even know what to say. I love the plot, the characters, the settings. Mostly I love the interctions between characters.
Anyway i'll wait patiently for the next installment and go read perfect slytherins now.