Famous Last Words
Neat, and nice to see a Harry/Tracey match, it's alway fus to see those that have more than just the standard match, and Harry with some of the Slytherin girls are always a fun read, as we get to see a Harry that is a little more planning and cunning, and able to do what he needs to do, though it wouldn't be a big surprise if Dumbledorewould do something to keep Harry under control until it was impossible, heck, he'd probably try to control him the rest of his life if he could.
A cute little story; too bad you don't show some of the effects, but maybe those were best left to the imagination.
This is why you have so many adoring (read: rabid) fans, Jeconais. You write something like this, and it's better than 98% of all other HP fanfics on the internet. But you've left it as is, since "it wasn't quite good enough" to be finished into a "real fic."
I was laughing at some parts, and while other parts were clichéd character bashing, it was still a thoroughly fun read.
Really, it's too bad you won't finish this off, just to complete the "Harry/canon female character" pairing set you sometimes seem to be working on.
Take away there magic, that a cool plan and the sex sounds even better!
quite nice - beta'ed or not
like the story line, although I am always saddened by stories where Hermione loses her mind.
thanks for sharing
Great job--makes me look forward to reading the longer Harry/Daphne fic that you say is coming. Wonderful use of sarcasm, a believable if rushed Slitherin attitude and a credible way out of the trap.
Nice one! Feel free to drabble on. I especially like your use of an under-used character. I wonder what Tracy Looks like? Well, we know she has great pins anyway. . .
Cute. Real cute. And double-Polyjuice? Neat trick, that. And yes, I can buy goblin help (Griphook notwithstanding); Lucius Malfoy's attitude about goblins is all too commonplace. (Harry's own attitude about goblins, however, is decidedly UNcommon.)
Well the grammar is really not that bad. It's quite readable actually. What was that movie again? That quote reminds me of something but I don't remember what...
As for the story it isn't bad, actually I'm pretty sure you could make it into a real fic. Preferably not too long, I like short stories more anyway ;).
Oh and I didn't get any fire ants, but there seems to be a termite invasion.
That was cool and a prity good oneshot all on it's own.
‘If you strike me down, I shall become more powerful than you could possibly imagine’
I had to lol at that part.. was good
'I enjoyed writing this - it was a bit of fun. I did think about filling it out into a real fic, but really, it wasn't quite good enough for it.'
I disagree! I think that the idea is plenty good! But I still like what you did with it
I like this one. But, yeah, it is at it's natural end. A good one shot. To take it furthur would just be an angst fest, as people rushed to apologize for something they willing did without real remorse.
Thanks for writing.
your right it could be, but it might not be quite good enough. then again most think you are good enough to make up for it and make it a good story to continue.
Delish! I think this one does have legs (sorry, couldn't resist), though.
Heh, this was a fun read. If you ever feel drabbley again, how about a short one on the WW's reaction? XD
Hehe. Great stuff. Your right you couldn't make this a real fic not because it's not good enough but because the just wasn't a lot you could write.
Loved it, good piece of work, quite a different story to your usual ones.
Nice twist after the execution tough I'm a bit curious about when the exchange between Harry and Scrimgeour was made, I confess. It's really nice to have some "light" stories to read between the chapters of the "serious" ones!
I like this one. Would you be willing to expand on it at some point??
That was good for a chuckle.
You claim that this piece is rough, but it is still better written than 90% of the fanfic out there.